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It was interesting to read and the sections are well divided.
The transition words are not appropriate because ''first'' is used two times (for the section one and two). Also, there are no transition words for the section three and the conclusion.
Although, in the conclusion, it is captivating to remind the readers that these technique are only for professionals.
Good mapping sentence in your introduction. It separates well every subject.
To continue with your introduction, the statement of intention does not appear clearly. For the body text it should had been a good idea to separate in two paragraphes the formats and the measure systems.
The subject is well explained and extremely interesting because it is different from others texts.
I found your abstract to your term paper quite interesting, as I would like to pursue a career in freelance journalism in the future. I often get annoyed when I notice that social media is taking over the use of journalism in a way that anyone can write something from home and it will be publicly published for everyone to see. Rather, an educated journalist will go to school, get a degree in journalism and have to work hard to write a report but their report will not be as significant as regular individuals (citizen journalist) will have already covered that topic before hand on through social media. For example, a friend of mine was discriminated for her hijab at a palladium a month ago and her story became public even before it got published on a news site or channel. This proves how citizen journalism, where any individual uses tools such as the Internet to communicate and present an issue, is becoming better known and that professional journalism is slowly becoming less useful in the news industry and in the world in general. There is not much that we can do to stop the social media from exposing information before professional journalists can, however I believe that we should allow more journalists to enter the news industry as much as possible as is it quite difficult to get a decent job as a full time journalist here in Canada. Allowing more educated reporters into the news industry would allow professional journalism to overcome citizen journalism which will permit the audience from getting authentic information rather than opinions and information given by random individuals through social media. Overall, your abstract was well written and very interesting to read.
Your volunteer opportunity post is very interesting and original, as I have never thought about the church’s connection with the community. I personally love getting involved in religious events and even non-religious events that I think that individuals should get involved with their local church and organize an event where the community can get to meet new people. This idea can help expand communication and companionship between individuals, which can thus result in a better ambiance within the society. I personally have never participated in an event organized by the church, however I have partaken in an event organized by a mosque and I have also organized an event myself which allowed me to meet new people and increase bondage between myself and the Muslim community. These events are also a great way of clearing up misconceptions about certain religious interpretations made by various individuals. Your post is motivating me to work with a local place of worship as my next volunteer opportunity as I would like to invite individuals to participate in events created by the church or a mosque so that they may understand that places of worship aren’t only useful for religious people rather anyone is welcome to get involved with the church. One does not have to be Christian to enter a church and that is something that I would like to preach and show to everyone as places of worships aren’t only limited to religious people but they are rather open to anyone willing to get involved. A great initiation to making the church and other places of worship known to the community and allow them to connect with society would be to organize a children’s event with fun games and activities so that the parents of the children can come to the event and meet other parents and create a bond between people of different cultures. The event can be an open event where anyone from any religious background can partake in as this will avoid any discrimination and will create a compassionate relationship between individuals from different backgrounds as well as create a positive association with the church or place of worship.
I am pleased with the fact that you wrote your term paper on the issue regarding aboriginal abuse, as it has recently been further recognized by Canadians since the issue is constantly being brought up in the media and by the prime minister of Canada, Justin Trudeau. I actually volunteered for a non-profit organization that serves to distribute healthy meals along with hygienic products to the homeless in Montreal. When I volunteered for the organization last Sunday, I noticed that most of the homeless people that we distributed food to were aboriginals and I noticed that most of them reacted differently to when we offered to give them a meal. Most of them looked scared and felt intimidated by our presence that they would either run away from us or respond impolitely. Taking there reaction into consideration, I would assume that they reacted in that way because they assume that we will hurt them or act racist in front of them. I felt very bad at the fact that they are homeless but they are also afraid to get help from others, as they are afraid of getting used or hurt. Thus, I would recommend the youth and students like us to gather large committees in which we may roam around the streets of Montreal to meet with aboriginals and comfort as well as provide them with basic necessities without giving them the feeling of fear that they are in danger when we help them out. I believe that young adults like us should gather volunteers who each have a subtle and sweet personality who would be willing to provide comfort and bring a positive vibe to the aboriginals while handing out meals and hygienic necessities for their daily use. The initiation is neither difficult nor expensive if you have a large group of individuals who can put in some time and effort to organize a fundraising event to raise money in order to buy basic items for the aboriginals and distribute it amongst them in Montreal. By providing aboriginals with a positive ambiance to live in, there will not be any abuse anymore and they will feel equally appreciated and accepted in the social convention, as they deserve this respect and appreciation just like everyone else in the world. Overall, your abstract sounds very interesting and I am certain that your final term paper must have covered the issue of aboriginal abuse in every aspect.
Hi, I did not know a lot about Multiculturalism before reading your post, and reading it made me think about how there are issues covered actually by muticulturalism. As you mentioned, there are issues in education and religion... I think raising awareness in this case is a great thing to do because there are not a lot of people aware of theses things. However, if I were you I would of compared this to another country with Canada, so we could of understood more the consequences of this thing in another country compared to ours. Overall, I think you have done an amazing job, with a lot of research and thinking, I am looking forward to reading some other posts you have made.
I think you had a great idea to go and help homeless people at Accueil Bonneau. Nobody chooses to live on the street, and I think helping the ones in need is a great thing to do. Especially in Canada, where winters are very cold, people struggle to survive in the extreme temperatures, and all the help they can get is the best for them. I also liked that you posted statistics in Canada of the number of people that are homeless and need help. However, I think you could of interviewed someone that commonly works at that specific place in order to get an even better perspective to the everyday life of an itinerant. You could of even asked a homeless person to describe their experience, it would have been very interesting. Overall, good job for your work!
It is amazing that you went to help the animals, I think more people should get involved in animal shelters, and be aware that there are some shelters that do not put down any animals no matter what. I did not know that, and I think there are other people that do not as well! Also, knowing that the SPCA Organisation is not receiving money from the government makes us realize that it takes people that volunteer and give donations in order that animals receive treatments. Great job and continue helping organisations like this.
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I found this article very revealing about big cats. We do not usually consider having exotic animals in zoo's as a negative thing. It however is. There extinction is partly because of them all captured to be placed in a zoo, and also because of black markets. I assume that there are several associations that want to bring help to exotic animals such as big cats, in order to preserve them in our nature. Your article relates to one of my article itself, because my article is also about helping animals in the world. Moreover, it is about a couple that saves a lot of miserable dogs all around the world. Here is a link to my article:
Overall, I appreciated your article a lot, but I think you should of gone deeper, such as finding articles that are made by scientist to prove the evidence you have proven in your article. Nice job!
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